College Application Question

[Scoobz0202]

l am submitting an application to the University of Dayton and in the application there is a " Statement. " I must " submit a personal statement describing a significant achievement, experience or risk and its impact on you. "

I may be reading too much into this, but by asking for a statement are they asking for an essay or something shorter. I really have no idea as to what they expect from this.

[Joe]

I'd write a page

[Klinglerware]

Personal statement = essay.

[Ben E Lou]

They just want an e-mail address. I suggest [email protected].

[Klinglerware]

Dola - as GWB mentions, keep it to a page...

[Ksyrup]

You should go with the old stand-by and internet staple:




I am a dynamic figure, often seen scaling walls and crushing ice. I have been known to remodel train stations on my lunch breaks, making them more efficient in the area of heat retention. I translate ethnic slurs for Cuban refugees, I write award-winning operas, I manage time efficiently.

Occasionally, I tread water for three days in a row. I woo women with my sensuous and godlike trombone playing, I can pilot bicycles up severe inclines with unflagging speed, and I cook Thirty-Minute Brownies in twenty minutes. I am an expert in stucco, a veteran in love, and an outlaw in Peru.

Using only a hoe and a large glass of water, I once single-handedly defended a small village in the Amazon Basin from a horde of ferocious army ants. I play bluegrass cello, I was scouted by the Mets, I am the subject of numerous documentaries. When I'm bored, I build large suspension bridges in my yard. I enjoy urban hang gliding. On Wednesdays, after school, I repair electrical appliances free of charge.

I am an abstract artist, a concrete analyst, and a ruthless bookie. Critics worldwide swoon over my original line of corduroy evening wear. I don't perspire. I am a private citizen, yet I receive fan mail. I have been caller number nine and have won the weekend passes. Last summer I toured New Jersey with a traveling centrifugal-force demonstration. I bat 400.

My deft floral arrangements have earned me fame in international botany circles. Children trust me. I can hurl tennis rackets at small moving objects with deadly accuracy. I once read Paradise Lost, Moby Dick, and David Copperfield in one day and still had time to refurbish an entire dining room that evening. I know the exact location of every food item in the supermarket. I have performed several covert operations with the CIA.

I sleep once a week; when I do sleep, I sleep in a chair. While on vacation in Canada, I successfully negotiated with a group of terrorists who had seized a small bakery. I balance, I weave, I dodge, I frolic, and my bills are all paid.

On weekends, to let off steam, I participate in full-contact origami. Years ago I discovered the meaning of life but forgot to write it down. I have made extraordinary four course meals using only a mouli and a toaster oven. I breed prize-winning clams. I have won bullfights in San Juan, cliff-diving competitions in Sri Lanka, and spelling bees at the Kremlin.

I have played Hamlet, I have performed open-heart surgery, and I have spoken with Elvis. But I have not yet gone to college.

[terpkristin]

For whatever it's worth, they're usually looking for between 500-1000 words, i.e. about a page depending on formatting and such.

The statement should be a reflection of you. If you're "stumped for ideas" I recommend checking out other college's applications, they may have better-worded requests for statements.

/tk

[st.cronin]

All college essays are just requests for brief, original writing samples.

[heybrad]

I race cars, play tennis and fondle women, BUT I have weekends off and I am my own boss.

[Butter]

Good luck at UD if you do get in. You'll like it there... as long as you're a conservative Catholic. And not black.

Or if you can drink your weight in Old Milwaukee.

[Scoobz0202]

Originally Posted by Butter_of_69

Good luck at UD if you do get in. You'll like it there... as long as you're a conservative Catholic. And not black.

Or if you can drink your weight in Old Milwaukee.

Ha. I have heard the stories I am sending in apps to UD, Ohio State, University of Toledo, and Miami U. I have seen all but UT. I really liked the UD campus more then the other two though. I am actually more liberal then conservative, and I have not been to church in years. But, I am not black so we are good there.

[Joe]

Originally Posted by Scoobz0202

Ha. I have heard the stories I am sending in apps to UD, Ohio State, University of Toledo, and Miami U.

Do you mean THE Ohio State University?

[Toddzilla]

Originally Posted by Scoobz0202

But, I am not black so we are good there.

I am soooo going to take this out of context for years to come...

[Scoobz0202]

Originally Posted by Ksyrup

You should go with the old stand-by and internet staple:




I am a dynamic figure, often seen scaling walls and crushing ice. I have been known to remodel train stations on my lunch breaks, making them more efficient in the area of heat retention. I translate ethnic slurs for Cuban refugees, I write award-winning operas, I manage time efficiently.

Occasionally, I tread water for three days in a row. I woo women with my sensuous and godlike trombone playing, I can pilot bicycles up severe inclines with unflagging speed, and I cook Thirty-Minute Brownies in twenty minutes. I am an expert in stucco, a veteran in love, and an outlaw in Peru.

Using only a hoe and a large glass of water, I once single-handedly defended a small village in the Amazon Basin from a horde of ferocious army ants. I play bluegrass cello, I was scouted by the Mets, I am the subject of numerous documentaries. When I'm bored, I build large suspension bridges in my yard. I enjoy urban hang gliding. On Wednesdays, after school, I repair electrical appliances free of charge.

I am an abstract artist, a concrete analyst, and a ruthless bookie. Critics worldwide swoon over my original line of corduroy evening wear. I don't perspire. I am a private citizen, yet I receive fan mail. I have been caller number nine and have won the weekend passes. Last summer I toured New Jersey with a traveling centrifugal-force demonstration. I bat 400.

My deft floral arrangements have earned me fame in international botany circles. Children trust me. I can hurl tennis rackets at small moving objects with deadly accuracy. I once read Paradise Lost, Moby Dick, and David Copperfield in one day and still had time to refurbish an entire dining room that evening. I know the exact location of every food item in the supermarket. I have performed several covert operations with the CIA.

I sleep once a week; when I do sleep, I sleep in a chair. While on vacation in Canada, I successfully negotiated with a group of terrorists who had seized a small bakery. I balance, I weave, I dodge, I frolic, and my bills are all paid.

On weekends, to let off steam, I participate in full-contact origami. Years ago I discovered the meaning of life but forgot to write it down. I have made extraordinary four course meals using only a mouli and a toaster oven. I breed prize-winning clams. I have won bullfights in San Juan, cliff-diving competitions in Sri Lanka, and spelling bees at the Kremlin.

I have played Hamlet, I have performed open-heart surgery, and I have spoken with Elvis. But I have not yet gone to college.

Thanks. That one worked and got me accepted. jk

Whatever I sent worked. I got accepted. Dayton may not be Harvard but, I really wanted to go so I am happy.

[Solecismic]

Congratulations. Bring your own girlfriend. A friend of mine was stationed at the W-P air force base in Dayton for a while and he said the locals call it "Dateless Ohio" for the apparent overwhelming male-to-female population ratio.

[Eaglesfan27]

Congrats!

[Pumpy Tudors]

Congratulations on getting accepted. While I have nothing to add regarding essays, I didn't know that schools actually asked for essays. Perhaps my alma mater is just weird, but all I had to do was bring some ID and take the ACT. As long as I wrote the same name on the ACT test as was printed on my ID, I was accepted.

Anyway, congratulations.

[Mustang]

I wrote an essay to get into my college... It was only 11 words long and they accepted me. It was -

Pay to the order of Christopher Newport University. Two Thousand Dollars.

[terpkristin]

Congrats!!!!


/tk

[sterlingice]

Originally Posted by Ksyrup

You should go with the old stand-by and internet staple:

I am a dynamic figure, often seen scaling walls and crushing ice. I have been known to remodel train stations on my lunch breaks, making them more efficient in the area of heat retention. I translate ethnic slurs for Cuban refugees, I write award-winning operas, I manage time efficiently.

Occasionally, I tread water for three days in a row. I woo women with my sensuous and godlike trombone playing, I can pilot bicycles up severe inclines with unflagging speed, and I cook Thirty-Minute Brownies in twenty minutes. I am an expert in stucco, a veteran in love, and an outlaw in Peru.

Using only a hoe and a large glass of water, I once single-handedly defended a small village in the Amazon Basin from a horde of ferocious army ants. I play bluegrass cello, I was scouted by the Mets, I am the subject of numerous documentaries. When I'm bored, I build large suspension bridges in my yard. I enjoy urban hang gliding. On Wednesdays, after school, I repair electrical appliances free of charge.

I am an abstract artist, a concrete analyst, and a ruthless bookie. Critics worldwide swoon over my original line of corduroy evening wear. I don't perspire. I am a private citizen, yet I receive fan mail. I have been caller number nine and have won the weekend passes. Last summer I toured New Jersey with a traveling centrifugal-force demonstration. I bat 400.

My deft floral arrangements have earned me fame in international botany circles. Children trust me. I can hurl tennis rackets at small moving objects with deadly accuracy. I once read Paradise Lost, Moby Dick, and David Copperfield in one day and still had time to refurbish an entire dining room that evening. I know the exact location of every food item in the supermarket. I have performed several covert operations with the CIA.

I sleep once a week; when I do sleep, I sleep in a chair. While on vacation in Canada, I successfully negotiated with a group of terrorists who had seized a small bakery. I balance, I weave, I dodge, I frolic, and my bills are all paid.

On weekends, to let off steam, I participate in full-contact origami. Years ago I discovered the meaning of life but forgot to write it down. I have made extraordinary four course meals using only a mouli and a toaster oven. I breed prize-winning clams. I have won bullfights in San Juan, cliff-diving competitions in Sri Lanka, and spelling bees at the Kremlin.

I have played Hamlet, I have performed open-heart surgery, and I have spoken with Elvis. But I have not yet gone to college.

Vin Diesel still has you beat. Chuck Norris, too

That said, this is what always cracks me up about both college essays and job interviews- this is what it seems like what is expected and people will lie all they want to give it to them.

SI

[PilotMan]

Originally Posted by Solecismic

Congratulations. Bring your own girlfriend. A friend of mine was stationed at the W-P air force base in Dayton for a while and he said the locals call it "Dateless Ohio" for the apparent overwhelming male-to-female population ratio.

Hey now, I met my wife while I was in Dayton. I really liked living there, better than where I am now. That comment has to be from someone who hangs out at meat markets. There are plenty of girls in Dayton.